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Sunday, January 6, 2013

Dave's Story

By: Dave

Hi good Day. Just call me Dave & I’m 21 years old now & am 5’6 in height. I’m just new in this mundane world of craziness so bear with me guys. Many were calling me cute & pogi when I was in elementary & high school. The same token now that I’m already working. Some were like being dismayed when they learned that I am a Bisexual. I dunno why. I’m also in the stage of in-denial sometimes. But for God sake, I love myself & before anyone else, I must accept who I am and live my life to the fullest. Well, before I thought it’s just a simple scenario. But as I went to face life, then I realized it isn’t like what you think is normal. Because even how educated you are, regardless of the medals you’ve earned in life; still if you’re a bisexual, you must choose: either you follow your heart regardless of or follow what your mind dictates no matter what.  Either or, it doesn’t matter what your decision will be, for me what matters most is that you’ve tried to correct yourself and at the end of the day, your just human & beset by all these temptations in life!
By-the way,  just to give you a background of my academics, I’ve been a valedictorian in elementary & high school and a Magna Cum laude in one of the most prestigious schools here in Philippines. So basically I know what ethics is all about and how to manage it. Just saying. Am working now as an executive in an international company and am still pursuing my graduate studies. Am taking my Master’s Degree in short. At an age of 21 I was able to self-sustain and even sustain others when I’m in the mood. Just Kidding.
Well, that’s just how my life revolves around here. I’m not a flirt nor a sex addict .But now am learning the ways on how to become one.yes! So long as I want to, I think I need more experience to achieve that goal. Give me sometime though. Haha..
Ok. I decided to write my story here to share my “first time experience”. 1st time kiss. BJ. Sex and many more! I’VE BEEN TOO ADVENTUROUS after finishing college. I’ve proven enough so I think it’s just the right time for me to get out of that comfort room, comfort zone rather. I’ve been in debates, quizzes, Top students & even competing abroad in debate and extemporaneous speaking and won! OK. Let me share with you my first experience with him. He’s my classmate in College; He’s also one of my competitors when it comes to academe. So I presume he’s not that ease with me, scoring higher than him most of the time; Interrogating his report & giving him a hard time proving his worth during report proper. That’s how rude I am…. maybe my way of expressing how interested I am of knowing him at best.
I can still remember when I arrived too late in school because it’s traffic. My class before is in a night shift. I arrived around 8:30pm. I was hurrying because our professor is a terror one. And unfortunately we have an exam that day. So with all my efforts, still I wasn’t able to take the exam and marked absent.so I felt PITY for me that very moment .It seems like the end of the world scenario. I was sitting at one corner and then suddenly Mark Joseph, the one I’m talking with, approached me. Dave, why you arrived so late?...I answered him like this, no it’s just traffic and I think am not feeling well today. So I need to rest. I said that to cut the conversation because I was very mad during that time. Then he replied again, do you want to have some drinks outside? Then I smirked for a while. And eventually said where? Maybe at SM North Padis Point if you want. Just to relieve stress after all these exams and terror professors!!!So I said sure if you’ll treat me, of course just said in a jokingly manner. But he said he’ll treat me, seriously. So I said, MUCH TO MY DELIGHT THEN. We used his car and then
Immediately went to SM North Padis Point. Inside his car, he’s like trying to ask me if am still virgin. I said yes. Then that’s stupid he seconded. I just stated a fact, and if that’s stupid then what should I do? He smiled at me and said do you want me to have S** with you? I was speechless for a while. And suddenly answered,  of course not…….but am blushing and stuttering during that time. That’s exactly what I want right now if you don’t ask me!!!!( Just blowing in my mind)…Then I offensively ask him,Are you kidding Mark?, he said no I’m just asking if there’s a possibility for us to do so.Then we laughed hard. No let’s just have some drinks and maybe it’s nice if we talk about our upcoming competition this March I just uttered. That’s how things happen here. So fast….I think it’s because he’s very straightforward at times .But not in this kind of conversation, I suppose. I know how to converse, but at this point in time I think it’s really something that’s personal & sexual. And I must admit that’s my weakest point! Shet.
If I were to describe the Physical qualities of Mark Joseph, He’s 5’7, fairer than myself, not-so-much chubby, white teeth, flawless skin and he’s F**kingly handsome. I must admit. Well, I cannot speak for myself but for sure, I’m in the same tune with him. It’s just that, I’m smarter than him. And most of the times am the leader of the group, that’s why.
Then we arrived. First, I just noticed, every time he strikes me with his smile, I think there’s really something that he wants to imply. Just wondering what? for the sake of stress relieving activity, I also tried to smile at him and started feeling the urge to make an score! Of course, we talked. We talked about everything. School Matters. Personal Matters. Future Plans. Etc.
And then eventually we ended up talking about Mature topic like sex. How often do you masturbate? I asked him.Uhmm…roughly twice a week, he answered promptly. I was waiting for him for ask the same question but he asked me a different one. It’s like this; do your parents know that you’re a bisexual? I said, partly yes & no. It’s like a secret which everyone knows I said. I didn’t say that I’m gay mama & papa, but deep inside them I feel that they can feel me, their only son is a daughter trapped in a man’s body. . Then, I went emotionally when he asked me what do you plan then in the future? Are you going to marry a girl or just stay bisexual and enjoy meeting guys? Uh oh. I was very confused with his idea of growing up without a companion…...So things went well…until I felt something unexplainable already. I think that was the effect of being zonked!
After 2 towers of colt and a bucket of San mig light, I felt dizzy already and then I asked him if he can still drive home? He said he’s not that zonked, that’s why he can still drive to our home. Since I’m from Bonifacio Global City and my family lives there, it’s a big hassle if we pursue that racket. So instead of riding me home, he suggested if I can sleep with him in their townhouse near SM North also. So it’s like a blocks away from our point of origin. Well, I have no choice during that time but to say yes.

And from there and then everything had happened with fierce. He has his own bedroom. I remembered the bed sheet is white, and it’s quite big! I dunno if he planned for it, but I can’t explain when he started kissing me like a girl. I can feel his muscles in breast, his f*cking smell, and when he blown job my dick. I’ve blown his as well in fairness.I must feel lucky because he was gifted of hugeness!..I mean his gonad is quite big. I can feel a bit tense during that time, a weirdness maybe. But He’s very nasty guy, to some extent like he’s very eager to grab my butt  & strart licking on it. I couldn’t feel much the pain during that time because of my dizziness. But when he entered his to mine, Holy shit it must have been my worst day ever! I suddenly felt pain and I was like moaning because it hurts and not because of its pleasure whatsoever! I grab his dick & stopped. I am not yet ready for this I fabricated. But he hugged me again as if I was a pretty lady who’s ready to be penetrated. But hell, I can’t!. I dunno why, I was still in resistance. I think it’s because my thinking is always mind over matter/ flesh. But I was also depressed during that time and just thought that everything happened for a reason. Then there’s this song that popped out in my mind which says: AKO’Y TAO LAMANG NA NADADARANG AT NATUTUKSO RIN!. Then hold on to that phrase until he finished fucking my anal.
John Mark has a Girl Friend. And She’s my College Classmate as well. We’re close friends really. But after all had happened, I refrain talking to my circle of friends. I just remained silent and waiting for the conviction if there will be. I’m a bit guilty of my craziness. I call it that way because I think the ovaries of my brilliant sex imagination have come to an end.

Well, I’m Single. Young, wild & free, so to speak.

74 comments:

  1. KUPAL! Ang yabang, mali mali naman English grammar! Cum laude daw!

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    1. hehehehhehe.. Kakatuwa

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    2. hahaha. tama. grabe " i felt pity om myself' hahaha

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    3. some are typographical errors...nagbabasa lang kayo so be patient...none of us is perfect...

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    4. sarap basahin ng english nya :) not hard to read.. but not hot than the others stories ..

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  2. Sakit sa ulong basahin, alam mo yung napaka-trying hard.
    Hanggang second paragraph lang binasa ko. Please be more honest with your story, and beside, dont use high faluting words that requires the presence of a dictionary in order for other readers to understand what you are talking about.
    And before you post your story (if ever there will be another one) please have the time check your grammar. You can use office programs to have it corrected.
    Sabi nga, gagawa ka na lang din, itodo mo na, wag puchu-puchu lang.
    Have a nice day Mr. Author

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    1. may tama ka....

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    2. oo nga. puro kayabangan. I wonder kung cum laude graduate nga ba talaga sumulat nito.

      But still, thanks Dave for sharing your story.

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    3. You're right, although I must say, "isa ka pa!"

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    4. grabe wala namang highfalutin!! di ka lang siguro marunong mag english =)))

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    5. Even in your comment! Gramatically incorrect sentence formation and improper choices of words are used. Nice try proof reading the story bro.. :)

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  3. The point of writing a story is for you to express, not impress. In this case, the author failed.

    Use simple words and understandable language and your readers will ask for more.

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    1. Well said, good sir.

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    2. VERY WELL SAID....

      It is bloody annoying to read the lines. I stopped after the first 2 paragraphs.

      This is supposed to be a horny literary piece..NOT A DISSERTATION !!!

      No need to use complex sentences and high level of English, especially if you cannot do it right.

      Furthermore....never brag about how smart you are when all that follows are series of grammatical blunders.

      Trying hard.

      But failed miserably.

      Nothing wrong with aiming high...just make sure you have the wings to do it.

      Otherwise...best to keep a low profile.

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  4. bkit ksi hindi na lang magpakatotoo. Cum laude sa isang prestigious school sa pilipinas tapos ganyan magsulat? Ambsyola lang eh

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  5. I wish you told your in tagalog. Could have been more interesting and perhaps you might be able to express yourself and the flow of your story. People are turned off from the vert beginning. Anyway thanks for trying.

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    1. I will correct you muna ha? Grammar mo kasi, I wish you told(WHAT?!?). Please do review S_V Agreement! Especially Subjuctive Moods.

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  6. Honor student ka ba talaga, andame mong maling grammar eh,

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  7. it's funny how i got to read the comments before the story and it turns out that the author is really a bastard,like how did he get the guts to say that he's a Magna cum laude. He does'nt even know how to use properly the subject verb agreement.

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  8. The funniest part is here at the comment section.it seems that the author is effective in getting the attention of the readers.the good things is,it shows that readers on this blog site are not to belittle w/ when it comes to quality story telling.meaning to say they are some kind of perfectionist.simple/little or big mistake is not acceptable.they are being distracted by the grammar,punctuations and what the author claims from the story. we must remember no matter who we are we are ought to commit errors, and not all who share their story here are veteran or expert in writing a story.we must bear on these errs.what should matter most is what the author would want us to know about,their experience. as long as we understand then we should accept.

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    1. "we must remember no matter who we are we are ought to commit errors, and not all who share their story here are veteran or expert in writing a story"-totoo,tinatanggap naman ng mga magbabasa na meron talagang manunulat na hindi bihasa, pero sa kaso ng sumulat ng istorya eh nagmamagaling sya. sasabihing magna cum luade tapos ganyan magsulat?acceptable naman cguro kung sasabihin nya na di sya sanay nagsulat pero yun nnga, sasabihng magna cum laude at galing pa sa prestigious school? nah. kung papanigan mo sya eh tanga ka!niloloko ka na nga tapos papaniwalaan mo pa.

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  9. Good job for sharing your story! It's unique and I can sense your emotions just by reading it!

    To other readers-pls show respect to be respected. Do not practice Crab mentality, if you want to rectify someone do it with RESPECT. A***0le$

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    1. sabihin mo muna sa author na ilugar nya muna yang pagiging ambisyosa nya. magna cum laude tapos ganyan magsulat?marami nang nagsulat dito na di nmn kagandahan ang grammar pero hindi namn sila sinisiraan kasi di nmn sila nagkiclaim ng kung ano ano kagaya ng author. cum laude daw. ANG KAPAL NG MUKHA!

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    2. What l am saying is for readers to Show respect. If that's how he is then let it be. Ur showing a bad attitude to compliment people with such sarcasm. Lakisha ng problema mo eh hahaha

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  10. People tend to be perfectionist; all knowing; hard to please.
    The reason for such reaction is due to the fact that the author failed to emphasized more of the sex scenes, otherwise it should have been great!
    Should you are more capable to produce better stories; post them..
    Its imperative that errors are normal as we are but humans. On the other hand; healthy critisms are good.
    The point is no matter how the story is betold, posted and or written, we read and learn from it. If you didnt enjoy it, PROCEED with the next! =))

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    1. hindi yun dahil sa di na naemphasized yung mga sex scenes. kaya sya binabash dahil nagkclaim sya na valedictorian sya t magna cum laude pero di namn nagrereflect sa pagsulat nya. yun

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    2. i totally agree...

      if you will brag that you are a bird...make sure you have the feathers and wings to show to prove your claim...

      otherwise.....best to keep quiet and let others to the judging

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    3. *erratum....

      let others do the judging

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  11. Mas magaling pang gumawa ng sulat ang pamangkin kong grade 4 sa kanya. Cum laude? Do you even know the meaning of it? What about mundane? Do you know the meaning of it without looking in a dictionary or googling it? One things for sure, you are completely and utterly delusional. Tsk tsk

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    1. Pak! Hiyang hiya naman kame sau ambisyosang author! Yabang mo! Dapat english subject minamaster mo ngaun para mkpgsulat ka ng maaus! Lol

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  12. Naiimagine ko ang personality ni author. Di naman sa panlalait pero...i guess u know what i mean. And yeah, di ko tinapos yung story....

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    1. Ko din, d ko tinapos, nabwisit ako sa pag e-english nya,ang haba ng intro sa sarili nya,naka ilang scroll ako sa fon ko

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  13. Sometimes poor grammar tend to spoil the content of the story.... Brush up your grammar parekoy...

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  14. Sino nagsabi na kailangan ng dictionary? Grammar? Ang arte niyo namang mga bakla. Thank you for sharing your story mr. Author. Write another one. Parang minadali put more details para yung malilibog eh matuwa.

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  15. i get the point of the author to try to write in english, however, the grammar lapse makes a good story bad. this is one proof of it.

    if you tend to write a sequel, please do so with our own language if you must, as to entice the people to read more.

    two cents worth of idea

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  16. This story is not about sharing sexperience! It's mr.author's way to brag about himself! Non Sense! If u graduated as magna cum laude, then there's something wrong with ur so called most prestigous school!

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  17. di ko tinapos ung story kc puro yabang ang nauna eh,,actually mahina din ako sa grammar ewan q b pero d ko npancn un nung binasa q ung umpisa ng kwento naartehan lang ako at nayabangan kaya d ko tinapos,,NO NEED FOR INTRO NA BONGGA LIKE MAGNA CUM LAUDE OR SUPER YAMAN OR GWAPO db?ugaling beki lang mayabang.

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  18. I would like to commend the (author's) effort put on to this blog. For sure this took the author a great deal of his time. Unlike the others who didn't enjoy reading and didn't find this an interesting read, I enjoyed reading this. It took me some time to finish reading this and at the same time trying, in my mind, to edit and improve every sentence. This blog is a an excellent drill-exercise for my students in their english editing and proofreading activity. Am [sic] (hehehe) sure my students will be very much challenged to edit and proofread this...major revision.

    Sarcasm aside, to the author, I appreciate you shared your experience and blog in a language you're comfortable with but your audience/ readers didn't feel the same way. Many of your readers were annoyed on how you narrated your story. Here are my unsolicited pieces of advice, try to work more on your:
     grammar, punctuations, parallelism, sentence construction;
     diction (choice of words especially of correctness, clearness or effectiveness - not limited to pronunciation and enunciation, just so you know..hehehe...);
     use of idioms and expressions.

    A good english is the use of kernel sentences. It is making use of simple yet effective words. You complicate things. For example, you wrote, "much to my delight then" who in the modern world will be using that? Shakespear? You could've simply said, "I'd be happy to" or "I'd love to/ that." Another, you wrote, "I answered him like this..." you could've just said "I answered him..." Including 'like this' only makes your sentence too wordy. It is like writing 'return it back,' 'sit down,' 'tuck your shirt in.' The common problem is that we tend to construct our thoughts and sentences in Filipino then directly translate it in english (sinagot ko siya ng parang ganito = I answered him like this). [This just reminds me of a girl who I interviewed. I asked her if she's willing to accept the offer. She answered, "Sorry, sir. But I'm having double-mindedness." It turned out she's having second-thoughts of accepting the offer. (nagdadalawang-isip = double-mindedness...hahaha)]

    Bottomline, you tend to use too much unnecessary, inappropriate and ineffective words in place of a word, thus, making your sentence "cheap."

    Try reading the blog entitled "Mason's Secret Garden" published last Dec. 30, 2012. It's a good read.

    I don't know if english is your (author's) first language but to me it's my 3rd. I don't expect most of us, including myself, could write very (very) well but we have to, at least, make sure we write correct, simple and effective sentences.

    Continue reading and writing,

    vinn0212005

    (P.S. To the readers, feel free to comment on my comment. Kung maka-comment lang wagas. Minsan lang naman. Hehehe)

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    1. Good to know that we are on the same boat... - israel morales

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  19. hirap kasi ng tao ngayon pinapansin lahat wala naman kasing prpktong tao ok. lahat nagkakamali. thats we call INSECURE. haha. . . .

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    1. walang perpektong tao. totoo.pero mga taong trying hard at mapagpanggap marami.

      "thats we call INsecure"-saan sa dun.trying hard o mapagpanggap? haha. magtagalog nlng kasi

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    2. Totoong walng perpektong tao, hindi din ako. Lahat tayo nagkakamali at siguradong magkakamali. Pero hindi ba't kailangan nating tiyakin na kung anuman ang ating ilalagay o i-post dito ay, kahit papaano, tama. Wala akong layunin na siraan o pulaan ang may-akda. Nais ko lang na bigyan pa siya ng pagkakataong makapagsulat at kumatha ng madaming likha na masmabisa pa sa mga nauna. --vinn0212005

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  20. I definitely agree with the one who wrote the previous comment (btw english is my second language). I acknowledge the author's effort in writing and sharing his story, the best way that he could. He may not be a professional writer and he lack some elements that will entice our readers. Also, we have a diverse group of readers. There are those who are really good who may not just look into the element of sex, but will definitely share a constructive feedback so as to improve the author's skills in writing and to challenge those who would like to share their stories (be it a true story or a fiction). Some are just after the libido they can get from reading the story and there are those who are in between. Nonetheless, we can't deny the fact that sharing a story in this blog is for everyone to read, hence we should be responsible writers as well. Everyone is motivated to either share their experience or to create a sexual fantasy because of what we've read and because of this diverse group of readers who keeps on reading the stories. We owe it to every reader of this blog. I encourage everyone to be responsible with their claims when they share their story. We just can't blame those who write sarcastic comments because that is how they feel after reading the story, they even share the same sentiments with other readers (freedom of expression). An amateur writer could express his story better if he'll use the language that he's most comfortable with and if he will just be true to himself and with what he would like to share (he could have a disclaimer if the story was indeed just a fiction). No doubt, every other element in a short story will follow.. We write and share our stories because we expect people to read it, hence we should exert our best efforts to make sure that our stories is worth their time...

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    1. I agree. --vinn0212005

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    2. Good to know that we are on the same boat...

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  21. astig! parang adik lang yung nag-sulat sa mga wrong grammar. hehe. dude, wag masyado sabog ah.

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  22. sounds like he ate a dictionary and started vomiting up words at random.. lol

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    1. agree... sapol na sapol.. one valedictory comment...

      to the author, i got two words foR you KAPAL MO!!!

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    2. hahaha ! that made me laugh

      "he ate a dictionary and started vomiting words at random"

      hahaha

      u made my day mate !!!

      LOL

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  23. can't stop myself from laughing, wag maging trying hard. dont make simple things complicated. ikaw lang ata gumagawa ng stress sa buhay mo.

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  24. Hi! I am not that intelligent but being campus journalist the main principle would always be "BE A READER FRIENDLY" - you don't need to use high highfalutin words since your intention is to entertain your readers and not your self. Secondly, are you sure you're a magna cum laude? Awards in college years are not the sole basis of how intellectual we are, even how dull a person can be, if he is "wais" he can secure an award for himself. You are on your graduate studies, yet you don't know the BASIC GRAMMAR RULES, CAPITALIZATION AND THE USE OF PUNCTUATION MARKS. I understand,that you may be not an expert writer but can you blame us of doubting you for you've been so proud of yourself?

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  25. when i read the first sentence the first thing came in my mind was this story well get a lot of bitterness from perfectionist insecure critics. im not mistaken.. more than what i expect..hahaha...nice one..publicity whether its good or bad its still a publicity..

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  26. oh shit...
    paano mo nagawa to?
    naikwento ko lang sayo yung nangyari sa amin ni mj, ang kapal nmn ng mukha mong gamitin ang kwento ko..!!!!
    alam ko ikaw yan, bestfriend pa nmn kita..tapos ano?eto lang..
    di ko alam kung magtitiwala pa ako sayo ulit hayup ka..

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    1. Bwahahahhaha! wala kang maggawa, magna cumlaude sya!

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    2. That's what they called plagiarism. Ninakaw niya lang ang mga thoughts, ideas and expression sa kuwento ng ibang tao at at pinipresent niya na siya ang original na lumikha sa istoryang Ito. Nakapagtataka ba? The author's manner of writing and style really speak volumes about himself. And, take note, that currently he is pursuing his Master's Degree. At yung Dissertation niya puwedeng ng isubmit sa Proffessor anytime dahil nabili na niya ito along Recto Avenue for P1,000 or more. Hahaha. The university should confer him the degree of Master of Science in Cheating.

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  27. Yaykz,, its funny how small things would turn out to be such a great deal to everyone here, peace on earth!

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  28. Yaykz,, its funny how small things would turn out to be such a great deal to everyone here, peace on earth!

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  29. Mga Pinoy talaga, kung maka point out ng errors sa English, wagas. Ano 'to English proficiency class??? Maraming nagsilabasang English teachers, haha. It's not about English matters, what matters most is how the story was told., Kung paano naiexpress ng author ung story,. Sa tingin ko OK naman. It's not that bad.Hindi na nya kasalanan kung hindi maintindihan ng non-native English speakrs ung mga malalalim na salita,. Grabe naman kung talo pa to ng grade 4 mo, cguro genius ung grade 4 na yun,. Talk about... exaggeration...

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  30. Wrong grammar ..
    I cocorect agad ?
    Maka english wagas
    Isa pa tong author
    Talandee masyadong ambisyosa
    HOY MGA BAKLA GISING !!
    kailangan konting mali BIG DEAL agad

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  31. Ang matalinung tao marunong umintindi ng mga kamalian..intindihin nlang natin ang author ..hehe

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  32. Nakatwa from a exagerated story to a debate of english critics. My naging honor graduate kya na kilala ko mas malala pa sa author. Kya kya ndi n nkkbigla

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  33. To you Mr. Author:

    You don't have to brag your "medals". Just write as simple as you can so that your readers will not scrap your craft. You can not yet parallel the likes of Robert Loodlum or Sydney Sheldon or other great writers.

    Good luck to your next stories, if there are any.

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  34. Ewan ko, pero may nakaisip ba sa inyo na ang totoo masyado ng tone ng istorya? Ang galing! Parang hindi ako nagbabasa. Parang nasa harap ko siya at nagkukuwento. Marahil dala ng emosyon kaya't lumalabas and hindi ekspertong pagtipa sa keyboard.

    Malala nga lang ang grammar.

    Ang layunin ng pagsusulat ay iba iba para sa iba't ibang manunulat. Sa tingin, nais ibahagi ng may akda ang kanyang resume. Abangan natin. Baka mag-a-apply siya.

    Pero bago ka sumulat ng susunod, kung may susunod pa...baka mas masaya kung sa sariling wika. O kung nais mong ipilit na gamitin ang wikang Inggles, mangyari lamang na bumili ka ng Strunk and White The Elements of Style.

    Meron sa National. Ok, Magna Cum Laude?

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  35. You can't blame the readers in this site for giving negative comments about the author. First of all, the author claimed that he was a consistent honor student and even graduated magna cum laude in one of the most prestigious schools in the Philippines. So, I assumed it must be UP or UST, and we all know that these schools are extremely selective when it comes to college admission, because they only admit students who are considered to be the cream of the academic crop. Considering this kind of impressive academic background, the readers expect the author to write a story in flawless English. But, it's sad to say that this piece of writing will not even make a passing score in the essay writing in TOEFL. Secondly, the author is obviously doesn't have the artistic flair in writing a short story, and that's understandable because most of us here are not really professional writers or journalists. For a future reference, I would suggest to all authors here to please do a proofreading and substantive editing before publishing your story, in that way you will not put yourselves in awkward position. Oh, by the way, English is my second language just like Tagalog, and I got my college degree from one of those so called so-so schools in the land of Abu Sayyaf (Mindanao). So, please excuse my English grammar. Thanks. Assalam Alaikum!

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  36. How sad... para sa isang executive ng international company at graduate ng prestigious schools with honors, wagas ang com skills at english mo (di ko maimagine pano nangyari yun, siguro either teachers pet ka or sadyang mababa ang standard ng school na pinasukan mo and yung company siguro asian lang kasi di papasa ang ganyang english com skill sa american or british clients)... sana nagtagalog ka nalang... napaka literal nman ng first impression mo as in nagpa impress ka sa una tapos olats na sa gitna hanggang huli... anyway, nice try but neither impressive nor inspiring... learn from your mistakes and try again.

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  37. Naawa naman ako....hahahahaha!!!!

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  38. For Author! Even you've got a lot of feedback (negative or positive) yet you give an effort to published your works and proudly showing your achievements. But then, sometimes we ought to write words which is not really needed in a certain story if your intention is just telling about your sexscapades, right? Now, lets say that you did post it without reviewing or just by clicking hoping for somebody to appreciate your writing skills. Yet, it turns out that what you want to perceive is too far from reality. In fact, you received criticism mostly downhearted. With all of this, i/we, the readers expect for next time to see a change in your story when it comes to sentence/grammar/etc or whatever it is in relation to English. For Readers! We are born CRITICS but UNDERSTANDING is also essential when it comes to this kind of 'thing'. Our intention sometimes to correct somebody is good but we see to it that before you do please check also yourself. Account yourself to what extent you can give/share rather than making things which beyond your capabilities. We all know that we are not perfect, but at least, we know to ourselves that we did try. That's what the Author did.

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  39. wala naman basagan ng trip...perfect kayo?,,,hehehehe
    wag magbasa kung ayaw....hehehehe
    chill people!

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  40. well at least mdami ngcomment haha.

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  41. tang inang english yan.sakit sa ulo.fucking boring!

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  42. Sa mga writers at would be writers, di bale ng mali mali ang grammar basta madaling intindihin ang mga sentences at naipahahatid ng tama ang mensahe. Ang problema dito sa story na ito, kelangan mo pang ulit ulitin ang ibang sinasabi para maintindihan mo. Nsa sentence construction ang problema. Siguro, nagmamadali. Mahirap din kasing magsulat.

    Sa mga writers at would be writers, kung kalibugan lang ang ikukuwento nyo, wag ng marami pang intro tungkol sa mga laude, laude. Walang nag lalaude sa kalibugan.

    Sa mga nagbabasa, kung di kayo maka perfect ng English sa mga comment nyo, wala kayong karapatang mag comment sa english ng iba.

    Sa iba pang nagbabasa, nakikibasa lang kayo. libre itong site na ito. If sa first 2 sentences ay di nyo na maintindihan, stop and go to the stories of Pilosopong Tasyo.

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  43. Even the American themselves are not good grammarians.

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  44. I think the author's story was very effective in this format. He was able to generate a lot of comments, and in a blog like this comments are what makes a blog. So good job author, you created a monster of ideas among readers.

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