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Sunday, October 26, 2014

Can't Get Over At Cebu

By: James Lee

Hi, tawagan nyo nalang akong James Lee. Obviously thats not my real name. This is my first time to submit a story here. So please bear with me. Sorry rin if nag e english ako, its just that im more comfortable writing in english kesa tagalog. But that doens't mean perfect yung grammar ko or yung spelling. Hahahah.

So this story happened in Cebu. Cebuano ako. So before I start let me tell you that my sexuality. I don't like labels. I hate to be categories as gay, or bi or even straight. I just want people to know me and accept me. So ano ba talaga ako? hmmm, let just put it this way... "I fall in love with women and I fall in lust with men." XD

Nasubukan mo na bang umibig ng sobra, yung akala mo sya na. Kaya inubos mo lahat ng pag ibig mo sa kanya? Well, I guess thats what happened to me. Her name was Sarah, she was everything I ever wanted in a girl.  but sadly it didn't last... I realized that sometimes no matter how perfect things may seem it just isn't meant to last.

it took me four years to get over her. Fours years and then I just gave up. Because you could only hurt yourself so much until you feel numb. And thats is when I started to experiment.

I guess I had always been curious. I never like straight porn. Or should I say I prefer to jack off with M2M. Even before I had girlfriends, I still watch gay porn. And if you are wondering.. yes I've fooled around with my past gf's. And i like it, but when it comes to satisfying myself I prefer to watch guys on guys.

So I had a second account in fb. A secret account. At first it was used as a means of stalking other people that are not my friends but then as time past by it became a means of meeting people like me, or should I say people with similar interest.

There was this particular guy. He was an open bisexual. Lets just call him Dan. I met him through fb and then we started chatting. after that we exchange number.
after a few days of texting, he invited me over at his place. It was my first time, so i didn't really know what to expect. I was scared of going but it was one of those "what the hell" moments wherein you just don't care.

so we decided in meet in a mall near their house. Dan, was your regular guy. He was the same height as me. He has a lean with cute childish face. he was what you call a twink. And I like it. We hit it off at once. We decided to buy food at the grocery.

upon arriving at his place we talked about regular stuff. I asked him who was at home and he said him and their maid only. So that made me feel quite at ease.

We ate the food that we bought. And then while eating I noticed that he was staring at me.

Dan asked me, "Half ka?!"

And i was like, "what?"

"Are you pure pinoy or do you have foreign blood."

I laugh at the question. I don't consider myself as good looking. Yes maybe on the right angles but on normal days I look hideous.

That was really the ice breaker for me. After that I was starting to get comfortable around him.

We watched television for a while. Then I told him that I forgot to bring the dvd I promise to bring. So I asked him to show me his pictures. You see he was a amatuer photographer.

We went into his room. And he turned on the computer. I watched from his back as he clicked through his photos. I was impress since I was also into photography. He also should me shirtless photos of him and those almost naked pics. It didn't took long until I started to get hard.

He noticed it because I was leaning against his back as he was on the computer. I guess he felt myself getting hard because he looked at up at me. I smiled.

Nobody wanted to make the first move. we started to playfully fought over the mouse because there were pics he refuses me to see. I was rubbing my hardness in his back.

One thing lead to another and then we started to wrestle in his bed. Out of nowhere. I pulled him close to me and kissed him.

That kissed surprise me more than him. But I could not back down. I was becoming agressive towards him and he was playing the innocent one. It was a playful foreplay. I stole many kisses from him before finally he stood up and locked his room. He took of his shirt on and I took mine. We played a little bit more. He playfully bit my nipples which I found very deliteful.

When we were fully naked we took turns in sucking each other. his dick was broader but mine was taller. It he suck great. I could help but grab his head to shove my whole dick inside his mouth. we were both moaning quite loud but at that moment I could care.

We fucked all over his room. I guess I was discovering sex for the first time. We were at the couch when I felt myself coming.

He laid in his back willing to be fuck. I played with his butt. He had a nice bubble butt. I grind behind him. Sliding my cocl near his butt hole. BUt i guess I wasn't ready yet. I was scared. He didn't forced me to fuck him instead he made me seat in the couch while he kneeled on the floor to suck my throbbing hard cock.

"Shit, Lamia... sige chupaa pa ko... ahhh kalami. Lami ohy.... shit sige pa. Ahhhh,"

these were the words that came out my mouth while my cock filled his.

"Sige pa Dan, Paspasi... Ahhhh anah..."

i said as i forced his myself deeper in his mouth.

"Hapit nako (I'm almost there), sige chupa pa akong oten (suck my cock more)... ahhhh shit Dan lamia oh... Ahhh, ohhhh... sige pa... anah... tilapi akong itlog (lick my balls).

he oblidged.

"Kana Dan hapit nako... ahhhhhhh... hapit na, sige pa... ahhhhhhh."

and then when I felt myself coming I shoved my dick deeper in his hot mouth. I knew that I was choking him but the sensation indescribable. i came out inside his mouth, he eat most of my cum but I guess there was just too much because he spit some in his t shirt.

It was an erotic sight to see a guy with your cum dripping in his mouth. I pulled him up and kissed him.

I tasted my cum in his mouth. We played for a little while and then he stood up to clean himself in the bathroom.

I laid naked in the couch thinking how I have gotten into this. I felt satisfied sexually but after the sex I still fill empty. Maybe it was because I rush myself into the experience. I don't know. But one thing I was sure of as Dan step outside the bathroom. There will be a second time, after this there is no turning back. I told myself as I pulled Dan back in the couch and we cuddled to sleep.

74 comments:

  1. This effin story needs some continuation dude! Haha. We'll wait. Thanks author :)
    - Dwight

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    1. Wow ha. Cool mo naman bro. Ahahahhaa

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  2. si dan taga south (sun valley ba ron?)

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  3. baka mine was longer.....

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  4. I know you said that your grammar won't be perfect. Duly noted. But I never expected it's gonna be THAT TERRIBLE! Seriously!!! Almost every sentence in each paragraph has grammatical blunder which made it irritating to read.

    I gave up before I reach halfway. Waste of time.

    How come you claimed to be more comfortable in English, yet you suck at it?

    Best if you use Tagalog next time. It might prove to be more effective to relay your story.

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    1. IKR? hahaha instead of getting horny, I just laughed at his grammatical and spelling catastrophes...I didn't even realize the story was over..but I do understand him because it is really hard for us, bisaya, to fluently speak, much more write, in Tagalog :3

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    2. Haha i was editing it in my mind the whole time!!! Good read though for practicing copy readers :)

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    3. Heeeee... peace! Nasa first paragraph pa lang ako tinigil ko na pagbabasa. Then I scrolled down the page to read comments. Mas natuwa ako sa mga comment! Akala ko ako lang...

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    4. hahahahaha,

      -blah blah blah hahahaha putik. libog na libog nako sa una kong nabasa eh, biglang nawala nung eto na binabasa ko hahahahahaha

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    5. Hahahahaha!! kalingaw and i was proofreading too while reading throughout the story. mas lingaw pa ang comments :P

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    6. Oy mga ate, ang tataas ng tama niyo! Pero totoo naman ang wrong grammar nightmare. Ang inarte lang nung iba magcritique parang tinalo pa si mariah carey sa kasweetan at kadivahan. Malay ba natin poetic ang pagkasulat at parang henry miller ang style at sinisira intentionally ang grammar for more depth. Ahahahha. Or merong hidden message bakla! Ahahaha! Ang arte ng ibang readers kaloka! Parang ung mga nagkakape sa starbucks na pare parehong nakafoundation tapos palakihan ng katawan. Amoy na amoy ang lansa. Charing lang po! Pampagaan lang sa mga nega comments. Nega but true. Sana lang di mawalan ng ganang magshare ng story yung iba na may mas juicy na kwento.

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    7. Hanep talaga ito si hombrepara2 pagdating sa pagka-grammarnazi, butata naman! haha!

      -"If I'm you.." / Invisible Girl here. Bwahahahaha!

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    8. Hoy mga english authorities sinabi na nyang hindi perfect grammar at spelling nya tigilan ang panlalait. Comfortable syang magsalita ng english kesa sa tagalog kaya sinulat nya ng english. If you find his english hideous tigilan bigla ang pagbabasa at wag na manlait. Pare pareho lang namang kalibugan portion lang ang gusto natin. Hindi rin kayo perfect.

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  5. Pls check your grammar! How could you stand with that story that full of gramatically error sentences!it sucks! Im not an English major but I can say that I can speak English better than you author. Sorry and sad to say that your story sucks due to your grammar!

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    1. Magaling ka pala ikaw kaya ang magsulat at ikaw naman ang laitin. Speak pala ha, umpisahan mo na magdaldal

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    2. speak for yourself ace. nahiya naman ako sa "that story that full of gramatically error sentences!it sucks!" mo, and yet your claiming that you "can speak better English"? seriously, you need some fixing.

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    3. Hahahahahahhahahahahhaha shabu pa ace!!! Ahahahahaha!!

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  6. Sa tingin ko mas importante kung ano yung nangyayare sa story kesa sa kamalian na nakikita niyo kung pano niya naisulat yung story. Intindi nlang mga pre. Kwentong kalibugan to, kwento ng iba't-ibang tao. Try niyo nalang kayang magjudge sa essay contest. Dun kayo magcriticize. Opinion ko lang :)

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    1. Thanks for this.

      - James Lee

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  7. really dude?!!! "how could you stand with that story full of gramatically error sentences", huh? ......that gave me a headache.......trying to call out the author for his gramatically challenged style of writing......hey,did you have somebody proofread your comment before you posted this? obviously your grammar needs a lot of tweaking, better yet, a major overhaul......mga pinoy tayo and english is not our first language, try listening sa mga kano, there's a bunch of them who butchers their language as well, talagang mapapa iling ka na lang.....okay lang ang constructive criticism pero iwasan na natin ang mag-bash, this will not do anybody any good.....listen to the lyrics of Michael Jackson's song "man in the mirror", one of my favorite songs, sapul na sapul.....and to you mr. author, bro don't let this affect you, i know that you wrote this without thinking about bagging the pulitzer prize for literary excellence :).....chill lang, i think bitter lang yung iba kasi you have a sex life, oooops, mybad, did i just say that? haha......take it easy bud :) - lbl

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    1. Shet nakakalibog ka naman magsalita! Wag po kuya wag po!! Ahahahaha. Sorry nakakalibog lang kasi ang well rounded at level headed magisip.

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  8. I would like to second that motion raised by Anonymous who posted his comment today at 9:13 am :)

    "how could you stand with that story full of grammatically error sentences.." HAHAHA!

    Talk about POT CALLING THE KETTLE BLACK.

    He had the audacity to bash the author's grammar, when his own grammar is equally shitty, if not even worse.

    Wake up !!!! You just made a fool of yourself, big time !

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    1. ACE....wake up mate!!! Check your own grammar before you bash the author.

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    2. Second the Emotion! Lol :p

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    3. hombrepara2, burn! Bwahahahaha! Waley ka naman, huwag ka nga?!

      -"If I'm you" / Invisible Girl here.

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  9. @October 27, 2014 at 6:30 AM
    proofread before posting your comment. yabang mo pa ah

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  10. hindi na KWENTONG MALIBOG ang title ng website na ito kundi

    "KWENTONG GRAMMAR AT SPELLING"

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  11. Ok Lang bay storya ra Na sabton nalang god NATO..ok Lang analysis gyod Naa Naay comment.ok ka

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  12. Mas maganda wag ka nalang mag-english para masaya :D

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  13. feel nako kaila ko ni "James Lee"

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  14. Hmmmm minsan may kwento tlaga na mahirap basahin and intindihin... pero kung nahihirapan ka magbasa might as well tigil mo na lang pagbabasa.

    Mas nakakabadtrip pa yung mga comments re grammar than the story itself. Di po ito english class ok?

    Galing galingan yung iba dito mga bobo din naman. Mas nagmumukha po kayong tanga in case di nyo napapansin.

    Ano po ba gusto nyo palabasin? Na mas superior kayo? Na mas magaling kayo? Its not criticsm anymore, bashing na po ang tawag sa ginagawa nyo.

    Siguro tama ang nsa isip ko... na yung mga tao mahilig pumansin ng mali ng iba... sila mismo biktima din ng panglalait ng ibang tao.
    ganun sila kainsecure kaya gusto nila maging superior sa pamamagitan ng pamumuna sa iba.

    In short ang dami insecure dito. Ako di ako magaling pero di rin naman ako bobo. Pero i let other people be... as long as di sila nakakasakit ng ibang tao, walang problema. Proofread? Letse! Report ba to? Official letter? Kung di ba naman kayo bobo personal erotic stories po ang nakalagay dito, kung nahihirapan ka at ayaw mo magbasa, fine!!! Pero wag ka na magnegative comment!!!

    #highbloodsafeelingsuperior
    #malalakinginsecure
    #wagnapatulankawawanaman
    #talitalinuhanbobonaman

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    1. Err......did you just describe yourself in the last 4 hash tag lines?

      Ok na sana ung first 4 paragraph eh. Kaso...natuloy tuloy. You just made yourself one of those you adamantly hate so much.

      Nagbuhat ka pa ng bangko mo which made it a bit worse in your case. LOLS! You should have stood by your words..LET PEOPLE BE.

      Even the greatest writers have had their own shares of criticism when they were starting. That is how one grows and improve themselves. Assuming they will not commit the same mistakes again , of course.

      Less talk....less mistake.

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  15. Ako pa rin yung nagcomment sa taas re sa mga insecure....

    Guys keep on writing... mali man o tama grammar... who cares?

    Importante may nababasa kami... pampalipas oras... gumagana imagination namin... at naaaliw kami after a stressful work...

    Sa site na to always remember you dont need to be gramatically perfect. Kelangan nyo lang ay ishare ang kwento nyo. Kami na bahala if naintindihan namin ang kwento nyo.

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    1. How can one improve his craft if nobody will point out the flaws he is oblivious about?

      First step in solving a problem, is recognize the problem.

      One cannot address something he is not aware of. Or in this case, the gravity of it.

      Peace !!!!

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    2. Actually ... I agree with you.

      Hehehehe.

      - David.

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  16. i agree, maraming maling grammar, check sana bago mag post. i am not english major, but i know what is right or wrong sa isang sentence, and sometimes you will knw na may mali pag binabasa mo na...

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  17. I am an english-literary teacher and a blogger.
    True, that your story had plenty of grammatical error. But it is also evident that you wrote from the heart of a true experience.
    The grammatical flaws becomes an art of reading readiness specially on the ones who gained interest in what they are reading.
    An advice to the author: please do continue to write and never mind people's negative criticisms. It's always there. Just be strong and be bravre to accept criticisms.
    To the bashers: if you don't like what you are reading, then leave it. Don't make hasty generalizations. You might not know relative feelings and true emotions upon reading.

    Remember: If you throw two cans in the air, the Empty metal can will make a louder noise than full metal cans.
    Don't be too loud, you might be showing how empty you are.

    -Mr.J-

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    1. Ay puta kala ko wala nang matinong utak dito! Salamat for pointing that out! Mas nakakalibog na isang literary prof andito sa website nato. Alamna! Echos lang po.

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  18. funny eh? Naglalabasan talaga ang mga "SPOKENING DOLLARS" pag may english story dito. It's the thought that counts, dudes! Pakalibog na lang kayo! Kulatahun!

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  19. Sa mga nagcocorrect ng grammar na mali rin ang grammar - kape.

    But yeah, it was badly written.

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  20. Akala ko naman nakakalibog na kwento to kasi dame comment, pucha puro grammar pala, nawala libog ko punyeta mag upload na ng bago. Bwiset.

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  21. Sa sunod wag nalang sabihin na comfortable magsulat ng English para Hindi mapuna ng karamihan ang grammar mo. Nagmayabang ka kasi, ayun tuloy nauwi sa grammar ang mga comments sayo. Imbes na storya mo ang pag uusapan.

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  22. Oh noh...fan ako ng mga sinusulat dito sa blog..in fact, daily subscription ko na to in exchamge of a news paper while having a bfast at the canteen...hahaha...I used to check comments first after picking which one to read...well, 33 comments-interesting...then, I read those awful comments...natawa na ako...pero naawa din ako sa author...my advice, thou proof-reading is good, ang poor libog na author could not afford to have one kc gusto lang naman nya is to share his experience na nakakalibog din without compromising his identity...mali lang nya, nasabi nya na comfortable sya sa English and yet naiba na ang thought nang inisip nya story nya in tagalog then writing it in English...think in English then write in English, talk in tagalog then write in tagalog dapat ang principle. Another, sa mga bashers, thou good ang constructive critcism, sana may nag initiate na lang to edit the whole story injecting correct grammar and sentence construction following the subject verb agreements and dangling modifiers principles without losing the thought of the original writing and repost the story para mas ok...in that manner, nag criticize ka na nakatulong ka pa...eh di lahat happy...suggestion lang naman po un...good day and happy reading...kc pag ganito mga nasa comments...instead na madami pa magshare ng nakakalibog na stories nila, marerestrict at matatakot na din silang magpost dahil baka makareceive sila ng ganito kahabang comments din hahahaah...God bless everyone...

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    1. Ang taray ng dangling modifiers! Parang iba pumasok sa utak ko. Lol :p

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  23. Kayanga ayaw ko sa english, kahit kulang lng "s" lahat na nagtawanan, kaya sa nihongo pa rin ako, kc pag wrong, di ka tinawanan ng mga japanese, ni repeat and itinama ng hapon.

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  24. What the fuck? I am half filipino and half american. This story sucks! What the hell?! Fuck you author. This is story is full of mistakes. I'm not a perfectionist. I'm just doing what is right. The hell? Kung ganyan ka lang rin naman mag english, utang na loob! Please delete this story. This story is a trash. Bitch please.

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    1. "THIS IS STORY IS FULL OF MISTAKES?" The fuck? Did you guys study? Even the author. What is happening to this world? You guys are trying hard as shit. I'm an English teacher. Fuck. Please fucking stop your dumbness.

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    2. Yo english teacher! Angas ah! Iloveet! Nagiging soft tuloy ako. Hahaha.

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  25. Hahaha!! Hindi ko na binasa yung story, mas nag enjoy ako sa mga comments.. Hehehe..

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  26. Hindi tlga ako maka moved on dito.. this is the worst story i've ever read.. hilong hilong ako sa pag intindi ng mga grammars.. imbes na libog eh english thoughts ang tumatakbo sa utak ko.. hands up na ako sayo author!! You made my day!!

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  27. Buti nga nageffort pa yung tao magshare ng story nya though it would have been better siguro if tinagalog nalang. Tao nga naman haha

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  28. The comment section is so hilarious I bothered to comment. On mobile. Hahaha!

    To the author, naiintindihan naman gist ng story mo pero, dude, you gotta proofread your future shit next time. :)) And good luck with Dan. Haha!

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  29. Tama na ok?! Kala ko po nman maganda ang kwento....lalo ako nahilo!

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  30. Hahaha, you people are funny. I wrote it on my mobile and I didn't have the chance to edit it. I understand where you are going at. The way the story was written was a complete mess. I take full responsibility. But seriously, how can you judge me just by this? I didn't even think this would be posted in this site. Hahah. But still I am grateful it was. Anyways thanks for the effort in commenting about my grammar however bear in mind that the purpose of language is not perfection but rather in order to communicate to others. And I guess in some way I did that. If I have time I will write another, (with better grammar) in order to redeem myself but until then you might as well accept my sincere apologize for this. Again I understand your reaction, I would have reacted the same way. It just makes me sad how shallow people can be, I know you are not perfect but then so am I. Peace and Thanks again.

    Note: I didn't proofread this comment either. XP

    - James Lee

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    1. Hmmmm.

      Forgive me, Mr. Author, for telling this story.

      In 1965, a massive science-fiction tale was written. It was rejected by 13 publishers with comments like “too slow,” “confusing and irritating,” “too long,” and “issues too clear-cut and old-fashioned.” But the persistence of the writer finally paid off, and the book entitled “Dune” won the two highest awards in science-fiction writing. It went on to sell over 12 million copies in Frank Herbert’s lifetime.

      You may be unfamiliar with “Dune,” but I hope you are familiar with this second book.

      Richard Bach’s 10,000-word story about a fast-flying seagull seemed so unpromising that 18 publishers turned it down before Macmillan accepted it and quietly issued 7,500 copies. Rapidly mounting sales led to the book’s adoption by the Book-of-the-Month Club in 1972. By 1975, more than 7 million copies of the book “Jonathan Livingston Seagull” had been sold in the U.S. alone.

      Sumulat ka lang ng sumulat, and charge everything to experience. If, perchance, you will learn from it … then you learned. If not … then you did not. Remember: We always reap what we sow.

      - David.

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  31. at the start of the narration the author did make some disclaimer and by that alone, those who bash (as if a critic) should be more open to understand the existence of the lapses.

    How can we encourage the contribution of different story when some people hide from the cloak of being a critic as if editors of some literary works but in a broader sense, are just plain bashers.

    Go On, upload your story however you express it. in simplicity, i got the picture of this story by James Lee. Padayon lang Bai

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    1. Good luck, Mr. Author.

      Pag na-gets mo itong ilang sinabi ni Alexander Pope, mapapangiti ka na lang sa lahat ng ito.


      Fir'd at first Sight with what the Muse imparts,
      In fearless Youth we tempt the Heights of Arts,
      While from the bounded Level of our Mind,
      Short Views we take, nor see the lengths behind,
      But more advanc'd, behold with strange Surprize
      New, distant Scenes of endless Science rise!
      So pleas'd at first, the towring Alps we try,
      Mount o'er the Vales, and seem to tread the Sky;
      Th' Eternal Snows appear already past,
      And the first Clouds and Mountains seem the last:
      But those attain'd, we tremble to survey
      The growing Labours of the lengthen'd Way,
      Th' increasing Prospect tires our wandering Eyes,
      Hills peep o'er Hills, and Alps on Alps arise!

      'Tis hard to say, if greater Want of Skill
      Appear in Writing or in Judging ill,
      But, of the two, less dang'rous is th' Offence,
      To tire our Patience, than mis-lead our Sense:
      Some few in that, but Numbers err in this,
      Ten Censure wrong for one who Writes amiss;

      But you who seek to give and merit Fame,
      And justly bear a Critick's noble Name,
      Be sure your self and your own Reach to know.
      How far your Genius, Taste, and Learning go;
      Launch not beyond your Depth, but be discreet,
      And mark that Point where Sense and Dulness meet.

      A perfect Judge will read each Work of Wit
      With the same Spirit that its Author writ,
      Survey the Whole, nor seek slight Faults to find,
      Where Nature moves, and Rapture warms the Mind …

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  32. Grabe bat puro bash dito?

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  33. Ang judgemental niyo naman. Parang ang galing niyo na sa lahat. Sige magaling nga kayo, bakit di niyo tignan ang kagandahan ng flow ng story kaysa sa pagtingin at paglait sa grammar ng writer. Ganyan kasi kayo, di marunong makuntento sa bagay na meron na. Puro demand, ni hindi nga kayo nakakatulong sa author. Kaya hindi kayo maipagmamalaki dahil sa ugali niyo. Uso magbago.

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  34. alright guys sikat na si james lee it's a new week new batch of stories let's all move on and to all would be bashers, hope u guys learned a thing or two from all these comments ..... constructive criticism is cool, bashing is soooo last week ;) - lbl

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  35. Ang ganda...
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  36. Nice comments, Mr. Author, perhaps your intention to share and the concept of the story was good. but that good should agree on how you do your thing. the story was abrupt, although you informed us beforehand that you're not that good in terms of language usage to writing. you better have proofread or atleast edit it! because its really bad! really!


    p.s: nyc spacing btw.

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  37. Great job.
    Nice story.

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  38. Gusto nako ni ubrahon, dugay na. Maka-sulti mi ug Cebuano bisag dili man ko didto sa South ni-tawo ug dili man ko didto ni puyo, kay taga Mindanao man si Papa nako. Diri na ko sa Manila ni-tawo ug nag-puyo. Pero makasulti mi tanan sa balay, kay bisaya man mag-hambal sila Papa ug mga ig-agaw namu. Kung musulat ba mi ug istorya nga naay bisaya o Cebuano na words, curious ra mi kung unsa ang reaction ng mga mubasa na Cebuano gyud ang sinultian.

    David

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  39. Despite of the grammatical errors, I/we should have to say Thank You to the author, coz' at least he gave us an erotic-entertaining work :D

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  40. mu comment unta kog sayi nya taasa sa ilang mga gipangsulti oe!!

    -Seann

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  41. Can we just read in peace here? A lot of you guys say that pointing out the mistakes will help the author out, but, it also depends on how you do it, right? There's what we call constructive criticism, and since almost everyone here is trying to be teachers, why not let the author know his mistakes in a good way? I mean, we're all grown up here. And bashing other people YOU DON'T KNOW PERSONALLY, is not a sign of maturity. We're all not perfect, so please, just hush up if you can't say anything nice to people/others here... wag tayong maging utak talangka! But, if you really can't hold it in, let your observations be known in a nice way. Simple acts such as that can really make this website even better to read from.



    -marc-

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  42. Mga manlalait if you did not understand what the author said, you have comprehension problem. Americans are poor in sentence construction too. Their verb agreement is almost always a problem

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  43. Lol the story was fishy at first
    then i realized the story was me and my ex haha :)
    Din't expect we have a story here
    -Dan

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  44. People are different don't expect all people will like you
    And it's part of life to have mistakes and we are not all perfect okie :)
    To JAMES LEE thank for that moment :) we knew each other
    -Dan

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